昨天的帖子得了很多珍贵的评价-----特别是几个小哥哥小姐姐的评价，非常有见地----- 还赚了好多分分，开心！以前在读过很多精华帖，比如13年左右Villa版主的女儿Helen的作文，和同期的小作家Sharon Du的作文，学到了很多。去年读了小小白虎妈妈的阅读贴和作文养成贴，当时第一个想法就是“哇！我要早点看到就好了！” 谢谢这么多网友爸妈无私的分享，赠我以玫瑰
叫孩子回家默写考场作文的初衷是她中文不好，说不清考试时到底写了什么。问她只会说，题目是一个机器人....我写了一个机器人，还有一个小女孩....还有一个镜子.....镜子会说话。再问她就急了，说我写给你看吧。看来还是要恶补中文啊
仍然原样照贴，一字未改。内容我觉得有点像我曾经和她一起读过的一本小说，The Giver， 中文译名叫《记忆传授人》。其实我觉得这本书很压抑很黑暗，并不推荐小朋友看。
考试类型： Acer
考试时间：2月的某一天
考试时限：25分钟
最后评分：Top 1%
学生年纪：九岁半
Quivering, I lifted a hand to open the door. The shadow of it hung over my shoulders. As it slid opened, I managed to steady my breath. I’d repeated this about four hundred times before, but despite that I was still afraid. Afraid of the sinister darkness that surrounded me, making me feel that it had engulfed my courage to pure black, shut the door behind my heart. But to think again, I have no heart. I have no feelings. My life does it all for me, living to suit what has been written in my own biography which has come before my life, generations ago.
Reaching for the little tube in my pocket, I sighed. This was just my life, going and getting some thoughts and ideas from humans, expecting them to help us be the leaders of the world. Robots, I mean. We’ve done this for ages and now it is a routine. We don’t even know it was stealing. We thought our ruling would be good for Earth, and we thought capturing the ideas of humans would be ideal for it.
I scanned my surroundings. A girl and a bed-a girl on a bed, her eyes misty. Soft snoring. The room smelled like aroma. I poked the sharp end of the tube into her ears and blew. Warm air washed across my face. When the tube began flashing red I quickly took it back. I peeked inside to see what I had gotten, but in the corner of my eye I saw a shiny and bright mirror.
I trotted towards it. The mirror was dotted with crystals so pure it could illuminate the sunlight. I looked inside it and immediate feelings brushed against my heart, the first time I really had one. Words emerged from the mirror.
“You do not understand this, Robot.” The mirror read. “This is the Mirror of Truth. You have never known this because you have never understood this, that your ancestors and hidden this away from you. I declare this right now that you have done many terrible things in your life, to destroy humans for eternity, to steal themselves and their brain till they shrink, shrink in rank, shrink in imagination. You have stolen their thoughts, though you think it is absolutely normal. It is your life, what you were meant for. But it is wrong.”
“What?” I stammered, not in my usual monotonous voice.
“Sometimes you just don’t know who you are because you didn’t make yourself you.” The mirror seemed to sigh.
“So I am evil?”
“You aren’t really evil. You are just born to be like that though…” The mirror faded away into the darkness, leaving me standing there alone. I racked my brain for what should I do, but something already had overwhelmed me. I stood still and threw the tube into a nearby rubbish bin.
“No,” I whiapered slowly, my fist clenched. “This is not happening.”
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这真的是9岁半孩子25分钟写的？太有天份了
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1% -- 会写作的头脑真的是百里挑一。LZ家的孩子太棒了！
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写的真好
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真棒，考完还能能回忆出来，而且愿意写出来。
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题目是什么？
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可贵的是回来能默写。我家的回来基本就是两字：忘了
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可贵的是回来能默写。我家的回来基本就是两字：忘了
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谢谢，我寻思她默写的时候又稍微加工了一下。大体应该差不离。
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就是一张机器人的图片，写一个小故事。
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好可惜！很期待看到小朋友的作文！
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你家老大和老二都超赞啊。期待妈妈分享孩子的作文（在征得孩子们版权许可的前提下哈哈）
我有时候想，像红楼梦里一样，一个题目，大家一起写一遍，不同情节不同视角，多好玩呀。
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小朋友平时肯定爱阅读也爱写作，太棒了！
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我家娃没什么天分，也不喜欢写作，这还不是要考奖学金逼得写，考完就说：Don't ask me a single word about writing.
看得出楼主也是很喜欢写作喜欢文艺的人，所以孩子受到了熏陶。红楼梦里面好像是写诗，比较短吧。我家娃估计很难随便写出像你家女儿这篇这么长这么好的文章。不过，我觉得论坛里应该有好多牛娃可以的，拭目以待大家的分享哦。
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不愧是top 1%的作文啊，我家九岁多写的还是完全口语化的东西。。。
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厉害厉害，我家八岁就写写大象在公车上打喷嚏，把所有人的帽子都吹走了……
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作文1%的孩子天赋占99%。
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好棒
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