澳洲小女在学校writing competition 上获得first prize 的作文

在澳大利亚中学教育




(it’s all just a dream)

As the poets like to say, I was born with half of my soul. Most people are, connected only by a thin,
red string by our ankles. When people are eighteen, they follow that red trail, to find their other half.
I have been following mine all my life. The end keeps stretching.

(the ghost of your fingers over my skin)

Everybody seems to find someone. I find no one.
I date. We all do, those of us that don’t find the rest of our souls early on. Boys and girls, men and
women. Freckled alabaster and smooth tan, kisses peppered in the dip of the collar bone.
Yet the hollow only grows.

(the remnants of you linger beyond my grasp)

I dream.
It’s a long dream, scattered over the years. I dream of dark brown eyes like rich soil, I dream of
slender hands that fit perfectly on my hips, and I dream of lips that taste like sugar and torturous
longing. I think I’m dreaming of my soul.
But as they all like to say, it’s all just a dream…
You don’t dream of your soul. You follow the thread. That is the only way.

(it seems like you’re running just past the corner)

A name grows on the tip of my tongue. But no matter how I try, I always seem to miss a few
syllables.
I’m always dreaming. It’s like I’m waltzing in an unending dream of my own creation. Yet the thread
still does not stop. They still think I am in denial, still think this is my subconscious crying. It’s all just
a dream, they like to say.

Yet I always awake, cheeks pooled in tears, with the phantom feeling of your fingers through my hair
and your warm skin pressed against mine.

(embraces like wind, smiles like shadows)

I remember a promise. Or I dream of one. There doesn’t seem to be a difference.
Fingers interlock. There’s something vaguely romantic about that word, as if we are locking each
other together, inseparable. Not unlike the red strings that connect us. Your whispering breath
brushes against the skin of my ear.
There’s a long river, white and silvery.
There’s a pair of scissors, sharp and unforgiving.
And there’s a scream. Something happens. I can’t remember what. That’s because it’s all just a
dream, they say. I cannot remember what did not happen.

(the breeze mocks me with a poor mimicry of your touch)

The thread ended today.
I see the red trail to a pitiful end. It’s broken and torn.

(I hear your voice in the shifting ocean waves)

I keep walking.
I have lost something, I think, as I trod the direction of the thread. A cemetery grows around me,
crumbling gravestones and wilting flowers framing my pathway. As the poets love to say, I’ve lost
half of my soul. I think…
The thought is too hard to name. I don’t.
So I keep walking. Until I stop. And there is the red thread. It begins broken and torn. It ends
underground, buried deep in soil covered by a blanket of grass. I fall to my knees, staring with
growing forlorn at the old gravestone.
There is the name I’ve been looking for.

“Amelia.” It fits in my mouth perfectly, rolls off my tongue like I’ve been saying it all my life. And,
perhaps, in a way, I have.
I wonder, Amelia, what your favourite colour was. Did you love the crisp coldness of winter, or the
warm breezes of summer? Did you look for me too, Amelia? Now I know her name, I can’t stop
saying it. Amelia, Amelia, Amelia. How is it that you can lose something before you find it?
My fingers hover over the engraved name.
I suppose it was all just a dream, then.
As I sit against the tombstone, I squeeze my eyes shut against the world, the stupidly bright sky and
the sun that would not stop mocking me. You had brown eyes, Amelia. Or did you? I don’t know
anything anymore. I don’t even know if souls are real.
It’s lonely.
I’ve lost something today and yet, curiously, I’ve also found something.

(what beautiful lies I’ve been fed)

The world ticks on without me.
There is a profound difference between being alone and being lonely. Those that are alone are not
necessarily lonely and those that are lonely do not always mean to be alone. I find myself to both:
alone and lonely.
How do you comprehend your soul to be a dream? How is the thing that has fuelled you with
burning passion meant to be nothing but imagination? How can a red thread, so obviously real,
possibly become fake?
I don’t know. It seems I don’t know anything.
Only the crumbling gravestone and the faded name carved upon it is real. Amelia. Or maybe even
that is false. Maybe this is a dream too.
Amelia.
Are you a dream?

评论


评论
多大的孩子? 写得这么好

评论
这么有才华的孩子是怎么培养的?请来个经验介绍贴!

评论



评论
good

评论
楼主,你家娃多大。 我家娃写作是硬伤,能传授下经验吗? 感激不尽。

评论
求经验+1,感谢

评论
几年级的作文?

评论
写得真好!

评论
小学生作文?

评论

8年级啦,14周岁了

评论

我们在她二年级前就是放养,三年级时陪她看了哈利波特的电影,看她喜欢就买来书给她看,然后就喜欢上了哈利波特,全套看了最少七八遍吧,成了哈利波特通,每周坚持看十几本小说,五年级后开始喜欢写作,目前写了二三十万字了。不喜欢上培训班,上过一年就坚决不肯去了,各科成绩a吧,反正也不突出,我们基本不管她学习,目前类似悉尼中学的精英班。
一路走来,我觉得最重要的是让孩子先爱上看书。

评论

我们在她二年级前就是放养,三年级时陪她看了哈利波特的电影,看她喜欢就买来书给她看,然后就喜欢上了哈利波特,全套看了最少七八遍吧,成了哈利波特通,每周坚持看十几本小说,五年级后开始喜欢写作,目前写了二三十万字了。不喜欢上培训班,上过一年就坚决不肯去了,各科成绩a吧,反正也不突出,我们基本不管她学习,目前类似悉尼中学的精英班,现在八年级了,准备明年考QA的Kevin Grove校区。
一路走来,我觉得最重要的是让她爱上看书。

评论

八年级写的蛮有深度的呢。

评论


评论
感谢分享!

评论

最重要的是一本小说要反复看,看熟看烂,我看我女儿就是这样,很多小说都是看了很多遍的。

评论
想问下,哪里参加吗?谢谢

评论

嗯,好的, 我娃八岁,但是只喜欢看皮卡丘,minecraft这种,买了整套的哈利波特,他都没摸一下, 哈哈哈哈哈

桑心

评论
一个文艺少女诞生了

评论

这个是学校组织的比赛哦

评论

一开始你可以引导啊,比如跟他讨论一下故事的人物情节,或者给点奖励,慢慢就上道了。

评论
感谢分享

评论
感谢分享

评论

哈哈哈哈,主要我也对哈利波特不感冒,也没看过书。哈哈哈哈

我看好多带娃学钢琴的,自己给整会了。还是不够上心啊
澳洲中文论坛热点
悉尼部份城铁将封闭一年,华人区受影响!只能乘巴士(组图)
据《逐日电讯报》报导,从明年年中开始,因为从Bankstown和Sydenham的城铁将因Metro South West革新名目而
联邦政客们具有多少房产?
据本月早些时分报导,绿党副首领、参议员Mehreen Faruqi已获准在Port Macquarie联系其房产并建造三栋投资联

中学教育

中学教育

说到私校公校个人的一些观点

澳大利亚1. 市场经济,这么多人愿意多花钱的东西肯定是好的,但是一样数目的钱,对于每个家庭的意义是不一样的,所以结合自己的经济情况来看 2. 私校因为是收了钱的,所以相应的,提供的 ...

中学教育

砸了Year12 第一次assessments

澳大利亚有这经验的家长请指教 儿子的12 年级第一个assessments表现不佳, 都在70几到80几分之间 孩子感到非常失望,也同时失去了希望 如何帮助孩子重建自信 想读UNSW的物理治疗physiotherapy 还有希 ...

中学教育

数学几何题求助!

澳大利亚三角形ABC中,三条高如图交于点H,∠A的平分线AF依次交两条高BM、CN于D、E。 XE、XD为三角形DEH外接圆的切线。 K在BM上,且XK=XD。 L为CX与AH的交点。 求证:KL⊥AH。 评论 大概: 設 EKD = ...

中学教育

新州HSC的高考状元榜出来了(更新17/12)

澳大利亚花落各家尘埃定,膜拜一下牛蛙们lol https://www.nsw.gov.au/education ... -lists/first-course 4U数学:James Ruse 3U数学:The Scots College 3U英语:St Aloysius' College 2U英语:Cranbrook 2U物理:James Ruse 2U化学: ...

中学教育

Oh Yeah VS OMG

澳大利亚放假了,大家心情如何? 我的心情很矛盾 Oh Yeah 不用起早,不用接送了。 OMG要管理teen的手机,电脑,ipad,ps4,Netflix,YouTube等等等等了,想死的感觉。 不管的话,就可以天昏地暗无休 ...

中学教育

Brisbane Girls Grammar School 2024 ATAR亮眼

澳大利亚BGGS had one student attain the highest ATAR possible with the 2024 cohort's median ATAR sitting at a mighty 96.20. Brisbane Grammar School is proud to celebrate the exceptional ATAR results of our 2024 Year 12 students. Five BGS students a ...

中学教育

VCE 2024 Student honour roll

澳大利亚VCE 2024 Student honour roll 出来了,但是各媒体网站都要注册才能看。从VCAA找到了这两个文件,分享给大家 View the results of VCE high-achieving students https://www.vcaa.vic.edu.au/Docu ... 024StudentData.xlsx ...

中学教育

维州VCE:ATAR 90以上哪家强?

澳大利亚根据最近媒体报道,部分整理如下(未更新): Rank School Name % of Students with ATAR 90 1 Mac.Robertson Girls' High School 73.1% 2 Melbourne High School 71.89% 3 Presbyterian Ladies' College (PLC) 70% 4 Fintona Girls’ ...

中学教育

考一门外语对VCE最终成绩的影响

澳大利亚不懂就问:要想最终VCE成绩拿高分,是不是必须/最好选一门外语呢? 如果干脆不考外语的话是不是会很吃亏呢? 孩子马上要上7年级,我知道学好任何一门外语都不容易,不知道这个时 ...

中学教育

明天是不是VCE出成绩了?

澳大利亚几点出成绩? 第一批志愿什么时候有结果? 评论 明早7点出成绩 评论 比新州出成绩早几天。又是几家欢喜几家愁 评论 哇,又是一年VCE成绩要出来了。好快呀。 评论 预祝每个娃都心想 ...

中学教育

请推荐口碑好的IB补习

澳大利亚如题,多谢 评论 What subjects?It's hard to find IB tutors. My son just completed IB this year, waiting for results that is to be released on 18th, but his final school report has 7s throughout his subjects: English 1st language(SL) Bi ...

中学教育

11年级参加VCE成绩怎么算

澳大利亚孩子今年考了两门VCE,据她说这次只有raw study score,那是不是要到明年才会和其他参加2025年考试的孩子一起scaling呢? 评论 還以為你在悉尼呢 评论 我的理解是按今年相应vce科目的scal ...

中学教育

两个明年7年级的offer 怎么选

澳大利亚现在有两个中学选择-Richmond High 半精英,还有一个小的私校。 距离上,小私校更远点,要早起。车程单程一小时。钱不是主要问题。主要是女孩子,偏文科,也不是特别爱学习,爱运动 ...

中学教育

問一下7年級考試問題

澳大利亚是不是重點和私立中學的考試和測驗難度要比普通中學難上很多? 评论 这个问题很难回答... 即使完全相同教学内容和同样大纲标准,出题目的人可以让考试难度差很多的。 评论 這個是 ...